Ethos: credibility.
Convincing your character. Be likable, thoughtful and respectful. Ethos is expert on the subject. For example, if I am going to persuade people to buy a detergent, I will use a mom to show the product.
Pathos. Emotional. The emotions you want the audience to feel. Sad, sorry, happy, scared.etc.
In the detergent example, I would want the audience to feel surprised and amazed about the product.
Logos. Logic/facts. Some facts and information about the product you are advertising.
I will use as an example the video of the girl with the "retarded" brother. She used facts such as the urbandictionary.com definition on the word.
October 31, 2011
Capitalism vs. Communism
Many people do not understand the significance of a capitalist economy versus the disastrous communist economy. I will begin by describing both economic systems.
Communism, otherwise known as Marxism, is an economic system in which everyone wins the same amount of money, no matter their work hours, job nor effort. For many people, this system can be alluring. This especially is appealing to the lower classes- the hard workers. There is another point about communism: everything is government owned. This means that you cannot have a private business and all the goods are government owned and that all the goods are distributed among society “for each according to his ability, to each according to his need”.
In the modern world, a Marxist society would be very appealing. The idea that everyone has an equal share, even though it can be defined by taking from the rich and giving to the poor, seem fair. There is, however, a flaw to the plan. A Marxist world would require a type of human nature that is not present. It would have to eliminate greed and jealousy and it would require the best effort from everybody in order for the society to be stable. If everybody did little effort, expecting to get paid equally as the people who work hard, the economy would be unstable and, eventually, collapse. Also, humanity has a lot of jealousy and greed that would be evermore present if everyone gets paid equally with different work hours. Marxism would work if those who work the hardest and have higher abilities are willing to get paid equally as those who have fewer abilities and work less. This is very unlikely. Communism would lead to slacking and inefficiency.
Communism in the 20th and 21st centuries hasn’t worked. In the cases of China and the Soviet Union, there has been a rather totalitarianistic way of government. There is an upper class that decides all the decisions and everything is government owned. The government cannot put 1 sixth of the world population into one big communist society.
Meanwhile capitalism is an economic system that allows private ownership. Dictionary.com describes capitalism as:
“An economic system in which investment in and ownership of themeans of production, distribution, and exchange of wealth is madeand maintained chiefly by private individuals or corporations,especially as contrasted to cooperatively or state-owned meansof wealth.”
This allows that the ones with higher abilities win more than the ones who don’t. In my opinion, this is the fairest deal. I would not want to be in a job in which I had to work 12 hours a day and receive the same amount of money as my next-door neighbor who only works 2 hours a day.
Capitalism uses willpower to foment business and economy.
Prepositions Used Correctly
OF
The Empire State Building is in the south of Manhattan.
In Africa kids die of hunger.
ABOUT
The book is about horses
The people were talking badly about him
ON
Gabriela was standing on the chair.
Beatriz was putting make up on her face.
IN
Jack in the box.
The cat put his paw in the fish tank.
AT
The map says we are at the traffic light.
The taxi driver said to turn left at the next Wal-Mart.
FOR
My aunt jogs every morning for her physical condition.
One million dollars were donated for the charity cause.
FROM
A soccer ball was a gift from my grandmother in my 9th birthday.
The robber stole 1,000 dollars from the bank account.
TO
My Rolls Royce was going to crash into the building.
His family was going in vacations to Paris.
The Empire State Building is in the south of Manhattan.
In Africa kids die of hunger.
ABOUT
The book is about horses
The people were talking badly about him
ON
Gabriela was standing on the chair.
Beatriz was putting make up on her face.
IN
Jack in the box.
The cat put his paw in the fish tank.
AT
The map says we are at the traffic light.
The taxi driver said to turn left at the next Wal-Mart.
FOR
My aunt jogs every morning for her physical condition.
One million dollars were donated for the charity cause.
FROM
A soccer ball was a gift from my grandmother in my 9th birthday.
The robber stole 1,000 dollars from the bank account.
TO
My Rolls Royce was going to crash into the building.
His family was going in vacations to Paris.
October 27, 2011
Literary Techniques
Symbolism: using an object to represent an idea that cannot be drawn nor touched.
Example: In Pocahontas the wind shows her mother and peace. Whenever she is mentioned, the wind appears and peace is transmitted.
Foreshadowing: a HINT about what is coming later in the story. Example: Cinderella. The look of her mother in the darkness shows that she is plotting something bad for Cinderella
Flashback: when story is interrupted to go towards something that happened in the past.
Example: Lion King. Zimbabwe has a flashback about watching Mufasa die.
Atmosphere: the way the SETTING feels. Does not refer to characters mind.
Example: An Extremely Goofy Movie. Goofy feels the home different after his son left to college.
Plot Twist: when something unexpected happens. Must have had clues.
Example: Bambi. The music and the mother's alertness hint the mother going to be shot
Example: In Pocahontas the wind shows her mother and peace. Whenever she is mentioned, the wind appears and peace is transmitted.
Foreshadowing: a HINT about what is coming later in the story. Example: Cinderella. The look of her mother in the darkness shows that she is plotting something bad for Cinderella
Flashback: when story is interrupted to go towards something that happened in the past.
Example: Lion King. Zimbabwe has a flashback about watching Mufasa die.
Atmosphere: the way the SETTING feels. Does not refer to characters mind.
Example: An Extremely Goofy Movie. Goofy feels the home different after his son left to college.
Plot Twist: when something unexpected happens. Must have had clues.
Example: Bambi. The music and the mother's alertness hint the mother going to be shot
Photos of Prepositions
The book was about horses.
The boy is standing on the chair.
The arrow goes from left to right.
The Empire State Building is in the south of Manhattan.
The letter is from Berlin.
The map shows that you are at the intersection
This gift is for you!
Jack is in the box.
October 26, 2011
What makes things persuasive
Persuasion is really important for people who want to achieve certain accomplishments for a certain cause. In class, we saw a video about wild horses and how many people are trying to protect them. The creator of the video used many different traits that made the viewer feel affected. Here are some of these things.
Music. The music in the video made us feel sorry for the horses. It created an environment that helped the horses.
Celebrities. The video used celebrities to talk about the horse crisis. This makes the celebrities' followers to join the cause, therefore being a success.
Facts. The video said that the original 2 million wild horses were reduced to 30 thousand or less. The facts make things more persuasive because they show that there is proof behind the causes and not just some people asking for help.
American Heritage. "if we kill all wild horses, the american heritage will be lost". That was the message of the video. It makes all USA feel sorry and wish to join the cause. It is a very clever persuasive technique.
Happy vs Sad horse. The video showed clips of happy wild horses in the open galloping and their manes dancing with the air AND they showed clips about confined, stressed out wild horses that are not happy and are not moving around freely like mother nature decided.
These were the persuasive traits that we discussed in class about the video. I bet there are more persuasive traits but these were the ones we saw in class.
Music. The music in the video made us feel sorry for the horses. It created an environment that helped the horses.
Celebrities. The video used celebrities to talk about the horse crisis. This makes the celebrities' followers to join the cause, therefore being a success.
Facts. The video said that the original 2 million wild horses were reduced to 30 thousand or less. The facts make things more persuasive because they show that there is proof behind the causes and not just some people asking for help.
American Heritage. "if we kill all wild horses, the american heritage will be lost". That was the message of the video. It makes all USA feel sorry and wish to join the cause. It is a very clever persuasive technique.
Happy vs Sad horse. The video showed clips of happy wild horses in the open galloping and their manes dancing with the air AND they showed clips about confined, stressed out wild horses that are not happy and are not moving around freely like mother nature decided.
These were the persuasive traits that we discussed in class about the video. I bet there are more persuasive traits but these were the ones we saw in class.
October 25, 2011
Progressive Time, Digressive Time and Suspense
PROGRESSIVE TIME
Authors use progressive time when the stages of the story move in chronological order. This means that there will be no flashbacks nor foreshadows. An example of this is The Wizard of Oz. Dorothy moves through the story without thinking about the past nor the future; the story does not move towards the past nor the future in any moment.
DIGRESSIVE TIME
Authors use digressive time in books when they use the methods of foreshadowing and flashbacks. A foreshadow is when the character or the book applies a guess of what will happen in the future. This is more rare than the flashbacks. A flashback is when the story goes to the past towards a significant event. An example of a flashback is in the Hunger Games, when Katniss recalls the story of Peeta's bread. This event and magnanimous gesture from Peeta is very significant in all the trilogy. That is why digressive time is really important in literature.
SUSPENSE
Suspense is the feeling of anxiety that one experiences in the moments preceding a big moment. Many authors use it as a page-turning device that doesn't allow you to drop the book. A big example of this is Suzanne Collins in the Hunger Games trilogy. One cannot stop reading because, at the end of each chapter, something big happens and you must read the consequences of the problem.
A big factor in suspense is music. If the creator uses the right music at the right time, the effect is really surprising. One example is "Scary Mary" video on YouTube because it shows actual clips from Mary Poppins and it only changes the music. It is really scary and creates a lot of suspense.
Authors use progressive time when the stages of the story move in chronological order. This means that there will be no flashbacks nor foreshadows. An example of this is The Wizard of Oz. Dorothy moves through the story without thinking about the past nor the future; the story does not move towards the past nor the future in any moment.
DIGRESSIVE TIME
Authors use digressive time in books when they use the methods of foreshadowing and flashbacks. A foreshadow is when the character or the book applies a guess of what will happen in the future. This is more rare than the flashbacks. A flashback is when the story goes to the past towards a significant event. An example of a flashback is in the Hunger Games, when Katniss recalls the story of Peeta's bread. This event and magnanimous gesture from Peeta is very significant in all the trilogy. That is why digressive time is really important in literature.
SUSPENSE
Suspense is the feeling of anxiety that one experiences in the moments preceding a big moment. Many authors use it as a page-turning device that doesn't allow you to drop the book. A big example of this is Suzanne Collins in the Hunger Games trilogy. One cannot stop reading because, at the end of each chapter, something big happens and you must read the consequences of the problem.
A big factor in suspense is music. If the creator uses the right music at the right time, the effect is really surprising. One example is "Scary Mary" video on YouTube because it shows actual clips from Mary Poppins and it only changes the music. It is really scary and creates a lot of suspense.
October 23, 2011
1st Quarter Project (step 4)
I showed Katniss's character development by making a Blabberize picture. The voice recorded was my sister Ana Maria's.
Here is the link to the picture:
Blabberize Picture
Here is the link to the picture:
Blabberize Picture
For the prevention of all future problems...
For all future problems I will meet the deadline and avoid these problems by doing the following.
I will not procrastinate and leave everything for break. I will pay more attention to what the assignments really are in class so I do not have to email Ms. Shawn asking an obvious question. This will help me by letting me organize my work time better. Also, it will delete the stress that can build up after working 8 hours on a vacation day.
I will also read the rubric carefully so that I do not make silly mistakes that can affect my grade. This will let me accomplish my tasks and it will remove doubt about assignments.
I will not procrastinate and leave everything for break. I will pay more attention to what the assignments really are in class so I do not have to email Ms. Shawn asking an obvious question. This will help me by letting me organize my work time better. Also, it will delete the stress that can build up after working 8 hours on a vacation day.
I will also read the rubric carefully so that I do not make silly mistakes that can affect my grade. This will let me accomplish my tasks and it will remove doubt about assignments.
I need an upgrade
I need an upgrade because, even though I got a really high score, I want the grade to be a perfect 4. All my assignments were a 4 except for one, so I am going to fix that minor detail in order to gain the 4 I deserve. I appreciate the opportunity Ms. Shawn just gave us to fix our projects because it shows that she does want us to get the highest score possible, even though it means more work for her.
October 14, 2011
1st Quarter Project (step 3)
I think that you explained well the character development and story elements pretty well but you are missing a few examples to each section. You just gave one way in which Harry developed and I think that is not enough to make me understand all the character development in your story.
Mathias Kling's
I like the way you described the 5 things that make up a story and the character development. I think you should put examples of how Katniss develops in Catching Fire. It will show that you do understand character development in your story and use it in real life.
I liked the way you described the conflict Robert Langdon was in. It shows that you really did enjoy and understand the book. It does not need more examples of character development. I really liked it and keep up the good work!
October 13, 2011
How I did as an Audience
In the time when this assignment was put, I was in a Model United Nations model in a university. I was United Kingdom in World Bank and I believe I acted with a good audience in the committee because I didn't talk with any neighbors, I didn't eat anything and I followed all the rules present.
But, in the ceremonies that took place in the mornings, I wasn't the best audience. I did talk to my neighbors, played in my iTouch and I chewed gum. In my defense, the presentations were really boring and LOOOOOONG!!! I know it was a bad behavior and manners, but in the bright side, I did my personal best in Angry Birds!
But, in the ceremonies that took place in the mornings, I wasn't the best audience. I did talk to my neighbors, played in my iTouch and I chewed gum. In my defense, the presentations were really boring and LOOOOOONG!!! I know it was a bad behavior and manners, but in the bright side, I did my personal best in Angry Birds!
1st Quarter Project (step 3.5)
Dear Suzanne Collins,
I admire your work completely. You are one of my favorite authors because of your creative writing, good descriptions and turn of events. I read your book the Hunger Games and I fell in love with it. The whole book was flawless and really interesting. Even Stephanie Meyer loved it!
If I would change anything about the book, it would be that Peeta and Katniss team up from the beginning of the Games and that during the games, Katniss is seriously injured and it is Peeta who must take care of her. This will be much more romantic and it would allow Katniss to end in love with Peeta in real life. This will be a very good change for Peeta because he has been in love with Katniss for a very long time and I think that he must be rewarded for it.
Another good thing about this change of plans is that there will be a lot of mixed feelings in the love triangle between Peeta, Katniss and Gale. It would be an interesting approach.
You structured and developed the book so flawlessly that I had to hide it beneath the dinner table to keep reading. It is a book that gets you hooked so easily that you cannot place it down. There is not one part of the book in which I felt bored. I think this is because at the end of each chapter you generated a large amount of suspense so you felt bad if you left the book. I read it in two days and I have never been so absorbed in a book in my whole life.
I have a mental list of best book series and authors. First there was the Harry Potter series that were in the first place and then there were the Mysterious Benedict Society series. I never thought a book could reach the level of the previous two mentioned but I think the Hunger Games is tied in first place with Harry Potter. I absolutely loved your book and I wish you could make a new book after Mockingjay. Maybe a sort of epilogue or a continued story.
I think what most influenced me in my attitude towards the characters were the actions and feelings they had. I always felt sorry for Peeta because he loves a girl who doesn't love him back and is only acting to love him for survival. He is a very educated and respectful boy and I think it isn't at all fair that he is the boy tribute from District 12. I think the most important actions he did were on the cave at night when he and Katniss were in the sleeping bag together. His honesty and romance he generated won the sponsors and practically saved him and Katniss.
I have also felt sorry for Katniss because she was the one in charge of her family after her father's death, she is the one that did anything possible to protect her sister Primrose and she is the one who volunteered to be a tribute in order to save her. In some parts of the story I felt mad with her because of her thoughts and feelings. This was especially at the beginning of the Games in which the Peeta and the Careers were teamed up. I though this was a beautiful strategy planted by Peeta because he gains trust with the Careers and at the same time he survives with extra amount of food. Katniss's feelings against him were really maddening to me because he will not kill her and he is in some hidden way, protecting her. He is diverting the Careers from her and he is risking his own life in doing so. That is why he was slashed in the thigh by Cato and he almost died. However, I loved the character produced by Katniss and I wish to read the rest of the series.
I loved your book and your writing.
Sincerely,
Alejandro Samper
I admire your work completely. You are one of my favorite authors because of your creative writing, good descriptions and turn of events. I read your book the Hunger Games and I fell in love with it. The whole book was flawless and really interesting. Even Stephanie Meyer loved it!
If I would change anything about the book, it would be that Peeta and Katniss team up from the beginning of the Games and that during the games, Katniss is seriously injured and it is Peeta who must take care of her. This will be much more romantic and it would allow Katniss to end in love with Peeta in real life. This will be a very good change for Peeta because he has been in love with Katniss for a very long time and I think that he must be rewarded for it.
Another good thing about this change of plans is that there will be a lot of mixed feelings in the love triangle between Peeta, Katniss and Gale. It would be an interesting approach.
You structured and developed the book so flawlessly that I had to hide it beneath the dinner table to keep reading. It is a book that gets you hooked so easily that you cannot place it down. There is not one part of the book in which I felt bored. I think this is because at the end of each chapter you generated a large amount of suspense so you felt bad if you left the book. I read it in two days and I have never been so absorbed in a book in my whole life.
I have a mental list of best book series and authors. First there was the Harry Potter series that were in the first place and then there were the Mysterious Benedict Society series. I never thought a book could reach the level of the previous two mentioned but I think the Hunger Games is tied in first place with Harry Potter. I absolutely loved your book and I wish you could make a new book after Mockingjay. Maybe a sort of epilogue or a continued story.
I think what most influenced me in my attitude towards the characters were the actions and feelings they had. I always felt sorry for Peeta because he loves a girl who doesn't love him back and is only acting to love him for survival. He is a very educated and respectful boy and I think it isn't at all fair that he is the boy tribute from District 12. I think the most important actions he did were on the cave at night when he and Katniss were in the sleeping bag together. His honesty and romance he generated won the sponsors and practically saved him and Katniss.
I have also felt sorry for Katniss because she was the one in charge of her family after her father's death, she is the one that did anything possible to protect her sister Primrose and she is the one who volunteered to be a tribute in order to save her. In some parts of the story I felt mad with her because of her thoughts and feelings. This was especially at the beginning of the Games in which the Peeta and the Careers were teamed up. I though this was a beautiful strategy planted by Peeta because he gains trust with the Careers and at the same time he survives with extra amount of food. Katniss's feelings against him were really maddening to me because he will not kill her and he is in some hidden way, protecting her. He is diverting the Careers from her and he is risking his own life in doing so. That is why he was slashed in the thigh by Cato and he almost died. However, I loved the character produced by Katniss and I wish to read the rest of the series.
I loved your book and your writing.
Sincerely,
Alejandro Samper
My Summative Self Assessment...
A.
- Gaby
- Blonde, blue eyes and averagely tall.
- To eliminate all rumors from Flying Hills Middle School For Werewolves
- There are rumors in her school that she is on drugs.
- Ashley
- Goddess Esopam and Bullies
- Lipstick, Full wallet, makeup, cellphone...
- She has lost the confidence and trust she once had from her parents because of the untrue rumors.
- She is a very sweet, unselfish girl. She donates 100 weekly dollars to the UNICEF children's fund and she is a very good student.
B.
- Exposition: Introduce the problem, Gaby and the situation.
- Rising Action: Esopam visits and Gaby is proposing the offerings.
- Climax: Esopam allows and accepts the offerings and eliminates the rumors.
- Falling actions/Resolution: The normal day at school and at home. Everything is normal again.
C. My story is a myth because it explains how people live now a days, and some of the problems found in middle schools in a way that involves mythological traits (Goddesses, werewolves, sacrifice. etc).
D. I explained the rumors problem by showing a case of a girl who's life has changed completely because of a rumor. Also, I explained the problem of drugs in the world (even though this is not really a middle school problem).
E. I edited my rough draft by adding places in which the story seemed incomplete. I also fixed the one problem I had in which I confused that with who. I only found those errors when someone else read my story
and they pointed them out to me.
F. I read Mateo Osorio, Ana Maria Samper and Samuel Fajardo's stories. My feedback and comments are in a post I made titled "Feedback on Virtual Stories" and it is in the project section of my blog.
G. Based on the rubric, I think I deserve a 4. I have completed all the necessary work
October 12, 2011
1st Quarter Project (step 2.5)
Katniss Everdeen Development:
1. At first she was a normal District 12 girl who lived challenging the laws. She hunted in the woods to keep her family alive and to feed them. She loved her family, especially her sister Prim. She wanted to protect her from the reaping in all ways she could.
2. The first noticeable change occurred when Prim’s name was called out in the reaping. She felt horrible and forced herself to volunteer to be in the games instead of Prim. That is how she started to gain control over her family and protecting them. Here, Suzanne Collins (author) made us understand that she is willing to sacrifice herself in order to save her family.
3. When Peeta Mellark announces that he is in love with Katniss in the interviews, Katniss’s reaction to the love announcement made her develop to a lovebird. It is then when the strategy to her survival begins. She is going to act being in love with Peeta and that will get her a lot of sponsors.
4. After the games begin, Peeta is grouping up with the Careers. This is a bomb to Katniss because she hates the Careers and cannot believe that Peeta is in someway “betraying” her being buddies with the Careers. This makes her feel insecure and unsafe without the company of Peeta.
5. When Rue dies, Katniss feels extremely mad the people of the Capitol because it is them who, in the end, killed her only ally. The Capitol uses the tributes as puppets to fight to death just so that they can enjoy themselves yearly. This sparks a feeling of rebellion in the heart of Katniss and she wants revenge.
6. Katniss is considered a really good actress because of all the kisses and romance between her and Peeta when they finally team up. It is really sad to know that Peeta really is in love with Katniss but she is only acting it to survive the Games. In this part, I felt disgusted with Katniss and sorry for Peeta.
7. When Katniss and Peeta swallow the berries in order to survive, Katniss grows a love for Peeta. This is because instead of killing him in his vulnerable state, she is willing to die in order for him to live. I knew what she was planning because if she managed to kill her supposedly “love of her life”, she would receive a lot of hatred from the Capitol and she wouldn’t be able to forgive herself. What she didn’t know is that this was an act of rebellion to the Capitol. It was challenging their rules and allowing two victors to be winners.
Setting: The setting of the story is in the nation of Panem 700 years from now. It especially takes place in 3 places: District 12, the Capitol or the Arena. It is in a very harsh and cruel environment because there is hunger and fights to death.
Plot: the annual Hunger Games are a series of competitions in which twenty four tributes compete to win. They will fight to death for survival. It is really cruel because the tributes are forced to be part of the harsh environment and situations. Katniss and Peeta have to act as if they are in love to gain sponsors and to survive the Games.
Character: Katniss was a poor girl from District 12 who is in charge for her family after her father died. Her sister, Prim, was chosen to the games but she volunteered to be a tribute in order to save her little sister. She goes to the games and acts to be in love with her partner from District 12, Peeta Mellark.
Peeta Mellark is a boy from District 12, son of a baker, who is in love with Katniss. He is chosen to go the Games and he is heart broken when he finds out that Katniss is only acting being in love with him. He is very respectful, strong and a really good painter.
Conflict: Peeta and Katniss have to survive the Hunger Games and they do so by using Peeta's art of camouflage and Katniss's gift with the bow and arrow. They mainly have to fight the Careers.
Theme: Survival. The theme of the story is Survival because all the events that occur in the arena are in order to survive. They have to kill each other to be the last one standing. It is a really cruel situation.
Setting: The setting of the story is in the nation of Panem 700 years from now. It especially takes place in 3 places: District 12, the Capitol or the Arena. It is in a very harsh and cruel environment because there is hunger and fights to death.
Plot: the annual Hunger Games are a series of competitions in which twenty four tributes compete to win. They will fight to death for survival. It is really cruel because the tributes are forced to be part of the harsh environment and situations. Katniss and Peeta have to act as if they are in love to gain sponsors and to survive the Games.
Character: Katniss was a poor girl from District 12 who is in charge for her family after her father died. Her sister, Prim, was chosen to the games but she volunteered to be a tribute in order to save her little sister. She goes to the games and acts to be in love with her partner from District 12, Peeta Mellark.
Peeta Mellark is a boy from District 12, son of a baker, who is in love with Katniss. He is chosen to go the Games and he is heart broken when he finds out that Katniss is only acting being in love with him. He is very respectful, strong and a really good painter.
Conflict: Peeta and Katniss have to survive the Hunger Games and they do so by using Peeta's art of camouflage and Katniss's gift with the bow and arrow. They mainly have to fight the Careers.
Theme: Survival. The theme of the story is Survival because all the events that occur in the arena are in order to survive. They have to kill each other to be the last one standing. It is a really cruel situation.
Feedback on Virtual Stories
1. Mateo Osorio: "The Great Teacher Deception".
I liked this story a lot because it war really neatly developed and it wasn't at all boring. Also, I liked that Mateo changed voices when each different character is speaking. That made the story be easier to understand.
But, I would make more slides because there were some parts that you could not see the text and it was difficult to understand the story in those specific parts.
2. Ana Maria Samper: "Molly's Revenge"
The story was really interesting and fun. I liked the way Ana Maria mixed greek mythology with middle school bulling. It reminded me of Percy Jackson and the Olympians. Also, I liked the pictures she drew when she could not find the perfect picture to insert. It made it look a lot more childish and fun.
What I would change in the story is the technical difficulties. There were parts in which the voice said something that was not in the text (1st slide) and there were parts that the voice was cut and the story was interrupted (2nd slide). All in all, the story was great.
3. Samuel Fajardo: "Homework Monster"
The story was enjoyable and funny. I liked the way he related the homework monster to our everyday lives. I connected the story to the cookie monster because of the picture shown in the story about this character of Sesame Street. I liked that the problem can be applied to almost every student in any Middle School.
I wouldn't change anything.
I liked this story a lot because it war really neatly developed and it wasn't at all boring. Also, I liked that Mateo changed voices when each different character is speaking. That made the story be easier to understand.
But, I would make more slides because there were some parts that you could not see the text and it was difficult to understand the story in those specific parts.
2. Ana Maria Samper: "Molly's Revenge"
The story was really interesting and fun. I liked the way Ana Maria mixed greek mythology with middle school bulling. It reminded me of Percy Jackson and the Olympians. Also, I liked the pictures she drew when she could not find the perfect picture to insert. It made it look a lot more childish and fun.
What I would change in the story is the technical difficulties. There were parts in which the voice said something that was not in the text (1st slide) and there were parts that the voice was cut and the story was interrupted (2nd slide). All in all, the story was great.
3. Samuel Fajardo: "Homework Monster"
The story was enjoyable and funny. I liked the way he related the homework monster to our everyday lives. I connected the story to the cookie monster because of the picture shown in the story about this character of Sesame Street. I liked that the problem can be applied to almost every student in any Middle School.
I wouldn't change anything.
If I were a god, I would...
If I were a god, I would create a long-lasting world peace. The main purpose of the United Nations is to avoid future wars. I believe that it has not worked because in the past half century there have been a lot of wars. There has been the Vietnam, Persian Gulf, Korean, Anti-terrorist, and many other wars. Also, right now there is a World War 3 threat in Israel because of the issue they are having with Palestine. Wars do not only kill millions of innocent people, it destroys nature and, therefore aiding and helping Global Warming. This is why I would end wars and violence in the world if I were a god.
The Worst Audience Behavior is:
The worst audience behavior is shouting out. Shouting out can be put in different occasions. It can be used when you shout a the speaker without his/her permission. Also, it can be used when you talk to your neighbor beside you. I believe it is the worst audience behavior because it is disrespectful to the speaker and the audience. A shy presenter is putting a lot of effort in the presentation and it would help him/her if the audience is respectful. Also, talking to your neighbor will interrupt the learning opportunities of your surroundings. That is why the worst audience behavior is shouting out.
October 11, 2011
Gaby and Esopam (Little Bird Tales)
http://littlebirdtales.com/tales/view/story_id/35121/
That is the link to my Little Bird Tale for the final draft of Gaby and Esopam.
That is the link to my Little Bird Tale for the final draft of Gaby and Esopam.
October 10, 2011
Gaby and Esopam (final draft)
Gabriella closed the cubicle door and started to cry. She never wanted to go out of that bathroom again in her life. No more hearing the words "drug addict" or "coke smoker" said about her. She did not want to go to school again in her life.
Earlier that morning, every werewolf at school had been scowling at her and looking at her weirdly. All of the people were whispering "that's the girl who was caught yesterday smoking after hours". Gaby did not understand what they were talking about, for she was in a surfing national championship at that time. However, that did not matter to the bullies at school who started to make fun of her and push her around all day.
Confused about everyone's peculiar attitude, she went to ask her best friend Ashley what people were talking about. She was just as confused as her because they were together in the ocean competing for the national championship. But, she had heard that there was a rumor that she was caught smoking cocaine after hours the day earlier.
Now, after a day of bullying and rumors, Gaby is in the bathroom cubicle unwilling to leave.
Earlier that morning, every werewolf at school had been scowling at her and looking at her weirdly. All of the people were whispering "that's the girl who was caught yesterday smoking after hours". Gaby did not understand what they were talking about, for she was in a surfing national championship at that time. However, that did not matter to the bullies at school who started to make fun of her and push her around all day.
Confused about everyone's peculiar attitude, she went to ask her best friend Ashley what people were talking about. She was just as confused as her because they were together in the ocean competing for the national championship. But, she had heard that there was a rumor that she was caught smoking cocaine after hours the day earlier.
Now, after a day of bullying and rumors, Gaby is in the bathroom cubicle unwilling to leave.
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Gaby is in bed awake crying (you would think that werewolves do not sleep, but that is just a common mistake made from the outside world).She had just been in a fight with her parents. They think she did smoke cocaine after hours and they do not trust her anymore. Gaby reminded them that she was in the surfing championship but they still wouldn't believe her. Of all the people in the world, Gaby thought it was her parents who would understand that it was just a stupid rumor. Apparently, they didn’t. After a few hours of lying awake she gives in to sleep. In her sleep, she receives a message from the Goddess of Rumors, Esopam.
"Gabriella, you have now seen what happens to little disrespectful girls when they mess with me. It is I who has created the rumor of your drug addiction. It is I who has filled all minds on your drug addiction. It is I who has felt disrespected and dishonored for you cursing at me the last month. It is I, who in order to get revenge, has made your social life miserable. I now advise you to offer me a gift in order to negotiate a resolution to this little issue of yours. You see Gabriella; I am the only goddess who dislikes having haters and is willing to negotiate peaceful solutions to teenager social lives. I will be awaiting an answer."
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Gaby woke up puzzled by her preposterous dream. Did Goddess Esopam visit her in her sleep? Was she really that insulted when Gaby cursed at her last month?
It happened a Sunday the month before. Ashley was suffering because a group of girls spread a rumor against her. She had cried an entire ocean because the whole school had found out and she felt embarrassed. Gaby, trying to make Ashley feel better, cursed at the Goddess Esopam and said she was unfair and stupid.
If this was why the Goddess created the rumor, Gaby would have to find a way to be forgiven.
Gaby started to think what she could offer the goddess. She already donates 100 weekly dollars to the UNICEF children’s fund, so that will not be a way out. After a lot of thinking, she finally decides what she will do. She will pray for the Goddess every day and she will offer delicious food for her. In the prayers, Gaby begs Esopam to please forgive her and to eliminate the rumors in her school, Flying Hills Middle School For Werewolves.
After a week of offerings and prayers, the Goddess visits Gaby again in her sleep. This time she says that she appreciates the prayers and offerings but that will not be enough to fulfill the bargain. She needs something else, something "that involves sacrifice".
The teenager started to think what the Goddess was referring to. Something that involves sacrifice? Did the goddess want her to kill her puppy in an offering mode to the goddess? No, definitely not that. Does the sacrifice involve her? She now knew the consequence of insulting a Goddess.
Gaby knew what the Goddess was referring to. She knew that this was for the greater good and there was no other way of saving her social life. She would have to do it.
That night Gaby went to her room to pray for Esopam. "O Goddess, I know I have insulted you and I have faced my consequence. Now, I am willing to make the sacrifice you expected of me. I am willing to swear to my own death that I will not whine, complain or insult in the rest of my short, insignificant life. Please, Goddess, accept my offerings and eliminate all rumors in Flying Hills Middle School For Werewolves."
And after that, Gabriella went to sleep.
That night Gaby went to her room to pray for Esopam. "O Goddess, I know I have insulted you and I have faced my consequence. Now, I am willing to make the sacrifice you expected of me. I am willing to swear to my own death that I will not whine, complain or insult in the rest of my short, insignificant life. Please, Goddess, accept my offerings and eliminate all rumors in Flying Hills Middle School For Werewolves."
And after that, Gabriella went to sleep.
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The next day at school, the weirdest thing happened. Everyone was acting normally; there were neither insults nor murmurs traveling around the hallway. All the girls were wishing her well in her surfing championship. All day Gaby was waiting for a mocking tone from a bully, or an insult from a girl, even a weird look from a teacher, but nothing like this occurred.
She went home feeling happy and normal. Her parents treated her as usual, greeted her with, “what did you learn at school today, Gaby”, and life was back to normal. It was then when Gaby knew that she could never complain again for the negotiation had worked.
Gaby went to bed and the only thing she said this night was, “Thank you Goddess”.
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